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    dots Submission Name: some sounds and a dreamdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotssome sounds and a dreamdots
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    The sound of crickets,
    a reminder of perfection and purpose
    existing as equals stitched to reality,
    calls to me before I leave night behind
    and forget day exists..

    I had a dream and it was real,
    everything was bursting color from
    its seams and spewed rainbow pricks
    into our swollen faces,
    into our eyes and cheeks,
    puncturing crusts of madness
    and breaking folds of insanity,
    allowing us to breathe again
    like we should.

    I had a dream, it seemed so real.

    There were clouds too...

    Svw




    Submitted on 2011-10-18 01:16:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dreams must come from something or somewhere. Little wonder they and their interpretation play so prominently in some of the major stories in the Bible. Yes Virginia, it seems there is a multiverse.
    | Posted on 2011-10-19 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      "its seams"

    oh...we sometimes dream in perfections and rainbows and perfect color...and deep blue sky...

    i like this..

    a dream that is more like reality...

    "and there were clouds too"

    ah yes...there was the threat of something bad, an uneasiness...

    the dream seemed so real..like life...

    i could use an extra pillow.

    i want to wake up breathing normally.

    i do like those morning sounds...when a good day is breaking....

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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