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    dots Submission Name: callsdots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Misc/Venting
    Total Views: 777
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       This wasnt meant to rhyme Its mostly just a bunch of thoughts bunched into a ALMOST organized poem...but I got a few thoughts out and I feel better.


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    You drunks calls they dont mean much to me right now..
    I imagine you laughin at me with your friends about the things we used to do
    cause the routine break up to makeup, seems like nothin new
    But not this time.The chivalry is dead and Im crazy cuz I never saw
    You couldnt listen to my thoughts or pick up my calls
    openin doors &buyin me drinks,
    but your not this superman like you want me to think

    See, got one guy who opens my doors
    he takes me home before twelve
    laughs at jokes in my texts, not ignores
    cause theres this thing called respect not neglect
    kinda like the man who took me on a date
    to a place we both love
    You missin me much?Im sorry but its just not enough.

    I know your layin in bed &missin my scent
    missin the hairs that were stuck in your sheets
    the smile I gave when your hand &mine meet
    & Now your spendin time in your car
    callin my phone with these thoughts
    &All I give you is a broken heart

    I think your addicted to violence &attention, old friend
    talkin bout smashin heads in the night
    Now lets not pretend.
    I think that your love for sex is just loneliness
    But I got nothin to lend
    Im movin on to better sex, and love that you just wont comprehend.




    Submitted on 2011-10-18 19:34:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      thank you!
    | Posted on 2011-10-22 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this!
    that is all i can say
    but i do wish that you could change things like &- to and. cuz to because. things like that. it would make it professional. other than that like I said, I Love It!
    | Posted on 2011-10-20 00:00:00 | by jjd | [ Reply to This ]


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