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    dots Submission Name: A Homedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots A Homedots
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    There is nothing to lose in life but regard,
    for those who have fallen, perspective becomes something to look up at, can you dig it


    Nothing is so worried but the soul's of the the feet of a traveling soldier,
    bound across country and the Rest of the world

    That one end to the battle
    once a fighter always a fighter, and who does not fight
    for something to survive in
    bending for reason without understanding the balance of natural imagination

    twilight before morning suggests
    just react to that for a moment

    keep me at the casual distance between confident loving hands meeting for an embrace
    this will eternally be my home




    Submitted on 2011-10-19 10:08:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've read and re-read this piece and there is a tone and a mood to this that I really find inviting. It seems very stream of consciousness. Unfortunately, I am having a hard time fully immersing myself in this consciousness. Still, maybe I don't have to.

    I love the first stanza. And I like the lines "and who does not fight
    for something to survive in"

    I love these lines best:


    "twilight before morning suggests
    just react to that for a moment"

    Like we're just supposed to sit on that first line for a while . . .

    This piece has a zen quality to it.

    I guess I'm most confused by the last stanza. Something with the phrasing maybe . . .

    Sorry I couldn't do better here.

    Jane
    | Posted on 2011-10-23 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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