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Kindle entity


Author: Porcelaine
ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880 /703 /256
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /
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Kindle entity



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If I am forfeit then I am widow white,
Hissing color and sizzling thunderbites -
Coursing catastrophe and septic metal
Through a gallery of mistaken identities,
Chipped moments and defiled ideas.

If I am forfeit then I am naked dawn,
The primeval nature of virgin snows,
Freckles and lashes and undisclosed
Certainties in the quiet shade of trees –
Frantically rushing in this and that direction.

If I am forfeit then I am shackle rust,
I reverse not in age but in force, thus
From dash into hurling clash through stratosphere
I thrash, overthrowing foundations and hinges
Off the doors of simulated principles.

What am I, entirely?


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  Wow ... 2016. Haven't been on this site for ages. I remember sitting in Internet caffe's ... writing rhymes and loving your poems.

How time flies by.
And truth or lie
Blend in the rain of moments.
And space lets
Future become past
Much too fast.
| Posted on 2016-06-04 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]
  Our ages are years apart so that I do not get or fully understand certain references. I know about Kindle but have never used it. Looked up thunderbytes. I used to know a lot more about marijuana than I do now. Nonetheless, as always, I am astounded by your images and ideas. What you are entirely, is a wonderful poet.
| Posted on 2011-10-21 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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