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    dots Submission Name: Lookingdots

    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 278
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       Inspiration: Tarot Card XVIII: The Moon
    It's so hard to face one's demons but we must. The card challenges us draw on Divine strength and wisdom to cope. Once we face our demons, they can no longer hurt us. Moonlight is significant because it exaggerates what we see...and gives us new perspectives

    Personal Inspiration: Taking that hard look to face injury and pain.


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    Cruel voices
    Converge flinging
    Shame spilling spew
    They trash all my dreams
    and disparage the view

    They hold the secrets
    on how I should be
    but the secret's the answer
    elusive to me

    No matter the outcome
    the lesson's the same
    I'm wrong to the core
    So wrong I remain

    Embrace the message
    Beware the ingrate
    Keep track of each misstep
    and nurture self hate

    Score-keeping demons
    Disdain what they find
    I must know my place
    and I must tow the line

    I'm flawed at the start gate
    Every day of my life
    My sanity challenged
    I'm wrong if I'm right

    Dear Moon
    I implore
    Shine your light
    Let me see
    The mirror's distorted
    I need help to see

    My eyes are wide open
    I'm willing to look
    I dare face the challenge
    I want back what they took.

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      "dare" is what i saw in this piece.. :) it can arouse a dominance loving person.. a challenging answer to the snatchers and takers. v.nice .. impressive
    | Posted on 2011-10-21 00:00:00 | by Iram | [ Reply to This ]
      sometimes when we look in the mirror we don't like what we see...and we feel that we are in some way incompetent.

    not what we should be...but is that true?

    or is it that we aren't what others want us to be...are we wrong when we are right?

    or is it others who are mistaken...

    we are our own worst critics and maybe it's time to give ourselves a break.

    very insightful piece.

    | Posted on 2011-10-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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