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    dots Submission Name: Questioning the Upbringingdots

    Author: BusterLILblock
    ASL Info:    21/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 452/270/50
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsQuestioning the Upbringingdots

    From hand to heart.
    With all this crudity
    And all that nudity

    What my eyes see
    I refuse to believe.

    With all this pseudo,
    I can no longer try to be your hero.

    Just a hand
    that leads you

    From here
    to there.

    From wrong
    to right.

    From cold
    to warmth.

    From your stateless
    to my small amount of comfort.

    From the moment you come into this world
    To the moment we part

    I could only wish for each of your tears
    to land in belonging.

    How else could I bring you up?

    I just want the best for you.

    Submitted on 2011-10-22 12:45:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounds like the poem of a parent... Its very well written and has a deep powerful meaning. Your use of words are extremely articulate. I hope that things fare well.
    | Posted on 2011-12-05 00:00:00 | by Indaleco | [ Reply to This ]
      Excruciating pain is being revealed in this poem. It is difficult to comprehend at few points.
    | Posted on 2011-10-30 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      hi i really liked this your statement is true for so many people and their good and bad with their times with life
    well done and i think you will touch a lot of people with these few words and for me that is what writing is about
    well done once again

    | Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This speaks to me about my addictions that I need to face and conquer. That I can't really blame fully the environment I was raised in, but it still held some effect. I don't want my own to be shown such things but I can't control everything. Both helpless and responsible and it cripples me. wait oh um good poem kid.
    | Posted on 2011-10-26 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very sad, it made me remember pain I've long since burried. i like how you coupled the stanza's. poetry does not NEED to rhyme and i enjoy it when i doesnt. it was a great read, thank you for sharing
    have a fabulous day!
    | Posted on 2011-10-25 00:00:00 | by chiatealover | [ Reply to This ]

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