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The Crickets


Author: BlazeFlamme
ASL Info:    22/m/TX
Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23 /161 /138
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Crickets



When I look at your scars
I see your story told
And when I peer into your heart
I see the part that's gold

When you look at me
Know your reflection
Is true, the good in you
Through unfiltered passion

'Cause my eyes don't lie
The beauty I see
Knows all is good
As you can be

So leave your ghosts behind
Let's start over together
Be each other's strength
Bringing out the better

I'm not going anywhere
And if you stay as well
The dream won't have to end
Endless stories to tell




Submitted on 2011-10-23 04:41:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Everyone brings some "baggage" with them to a new relationship. The trick is for both parties to be able to reconcile that baggage in order to make it work to an advantage....

nice write!
| Posted on 2011-10-23 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this piece....no hidden agendas, no play on words...just a nice rhythmic feeling...i am here to stay...no matter what has happened to you before, trust me...i am here for the long haul...and i will take the bad with the good...

reminds me lots of my second marriage...we both had been hurt so much before and felt such a lack of trust in love....takes much to overcome that. to "leave the ghosts behind"

jacob
| Posted on 2011-10-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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