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    dots Submission Name: Life Simply Is...dots

    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLife Simply Is...dots

    Five men stand in a line
    Two face forward
    Three with noses to the wall
    All patriots- just on different sides

    The two have machine guns
    The three in handcuffs
    The choice between life and death is only a matter of time

    One of the three says silent prayers
    Another mutters to his dead wife
    The third stares down the wall
    All the while, the two wait for their orders
    The choice between life and death is not theirs to make

    God take me
    Loneliness has comforted me for far too long
    All I loved is gone
    I welcome the end

    God help us
    The sweat pours down my cheek at the thought
    Four children and one young wife
    A family without a father in this war torn world
    How will they survive?

    God strike them
    There scum has polluted our land
    Destruction not restoration is their goal
    Destroy them and restore us
    I will fight against them until the end

    God instruct me
    I watched the three in handcuffs stiffen
    As I shifted the gun on my shoulder
    It just wasnt right
    A life is a life
    No matter what

    What is taking so long
    Lets end this already
    They are the bad guys
    How hard is that to decide
    They have it coming

    The walkie-talkie sputters its demands
    All five jump at its voice
    The choice has been made

    Life simply is
    Until Death is restrained no more

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      This one hurts. Again you capture the moment in descriptive language. The reader is with you and though the message is pure pain....you make your point well.
    | Posted on 2011-10-23 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]

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