[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Curls of Foamdots

    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1230
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1050


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCurls of Foamdots

    Curls of foam crash amongst a jagged reef
    Caressing the shores by day
    Beating dormant beaches by moonlight
    High tides drenching once dry land

    Silent sprays of mist erupt
    In time with the soothing rock of the water
    The waves sing their lullaby song to a sleeping world

    With breeze the brine ripples
    Through storms it roars fiercely at the sky
    A brawl of Ocean versus Heaven
    Their powers raged recklessly against the earth

    Quiet it cradles all existence
    Protector of marine life
    Provider for land dwellers
    Source of all survival

    Expansive traveler
    Explorer of unknown coasts
    Creator of crevices
    Worn into the floor by continuous motion
    A force relentless in its wrath

    Lashing out on with brutish blows
    Fondling with tender fingers
    An indecisive energy gone unbalanced
    Answering to no one but itself
    The ocean continues on

    Submitted on 2011-10-23 10:12:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
    i'd say romantic, and scientific.it would go well on a natural environment campaign poster.i'd say more but i'll have to read it again, and let it seep in a bit more.
    | Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day! Very well done! I love the coast and the ocean and as the others expressed your imagery was powerful and made me feel all of what you were portraying and all the aspects of the water and its many powers!

    Super smiles to share :-)
    | Posted on 2011-10-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done. No rhyme, no strict structure - better! Cause often I experience a poem as horribly unnatural when it's obvious the rhyme was forced and someone had to go through a whole lot of editing to make it presentable. Because the wonderful imagery has a sole single purpose of representing a force of nature that is the ocean (whether there's metaphor or not) it is even more fitting that the poem is not restrained to fit into some pattern but is rather done in a more fragmented fashion. I love fragmented writing. It gives freedom to poetry and enabled a more personal unrestrained line of thought to just stream out. Good!

    | Posted on 2011-10-24 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem and here's why: You successfully captured a moment...You observed and found the words to translate the images. You take your reader with you. Also, you successfuly convey your respect for nature and the ocean in particular. Beautifully written.
    | Posted on 2011-10-23 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]