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Curls of Foam

Author: smartblond
ASL Info:    18/F/IL
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97 /114 /33
Words: 152
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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Curls of Foam

Curls of foam crash amongst a jagged reef
Caressing the shores by day
Beating dormant beaches by moonlight
High tides drenching once dry land

Silent sprays of mist erupt
In time with the soothing rock of the water
The waves sing their lullaby song to a sleeping world

With breeze the brine ripples
Through storms it roars fiercely at the sky
A brawl of Ocean versus Heaven
Their powers raged recklessly against the earth

Quiet it cradles all existence
Protector of marine life
Provider for land dwellers
Source of all survival

Expansive traveler
Explorer of unknown coasts
Creator of crevices
Worn into the floor by continuous motion
A force relentless in its wrath

Lashing out on with brutish blows
Fondling with tender fingers
An indecisive energy gone unbalanced
Answering to no one but itself
The ocean continues on

Submitted on 2011-10-23 10:12:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i'd say romantic, and would go well on a natural environment campaign poster.i'd say more but i'll have to read it again, and let it seep in a bit more.
| Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
  Happy day! Very well done! I love the coast and the ocean and as the others expressed your imagery was powerful and made me feel all of what you were portraying and all the aspects of the water and its many powers!

Super smiles to share :-)
| Posted on 2011-10-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Nicely done. No rhyme, no strict structure - better! Cause often I experience a poem as horribly unnatural when it's obvious the rhyme was forced and someone had to go through a whole lot of editing to make it presentable. Because the wonderful imagery has a sole single purpose of representing a force of nature that is the ocean (whether there's metaphor or not) it is even more fitting that the poem is not restrained to fit into some pattern but is rather done in a more fragmented fashion. I love fragmented writing. It gives freedom to poetry and enabled a more personal unrestrained line of thought to just stream out. Good!

| Posted on 2011-10-24 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this poem and here's why: You successfully captured a moment...You observed and found the words to translate the images. You take your reader with you. Also, you successfuly convey your respect for nature and the ocean in particular. Beautifully written.
| Posted on 2011-10-23 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]

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