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    dots Submission Name: Birthday of Autumns Evedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 540
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       It's my birthday and I felt like writing.


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    dotsBirthday of Autumns Evedots
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    How can I ponder of stasis?
    This elusive thread I wish to unravel.
    Polymer strand of sloth I battle.

    How does one dedicate to evil?
    That wretched smile I cast.
    Ashamed of hating all in my path.

    I sit on birthday wishes-
    Like pins in my ass.
    Uncomfortable acquaintances, I do laugh.

    How will I survive?
    Stretching my love- I'm on the rack
    Crushed in a vice- I failed to attack.

    How can this be?
    Time slips away on autumns eve.
    I'll be gone, wait and see.

    I bid you a farewell-
    Like the leaves in the wind.
    Follow the breeze where we'll meet in the end.




    Submitted on 2011-10-24 17:03:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has a nice old-timey flavor to it. I was thinking Hamlet, pondering things in the same sort of way. Timely since the new movie is out which questions just who did the works of Shakespeare. To me that's like saying that Pluto isn't a planet any more but I digress.

    This allusive thread - could be an elusive one instead, but I appreciate the potential for feigned mental ambiguity, at least I seem to use it a lot.

    I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2011-10-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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