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    dots Submission Name: A Swan I Truely Amdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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       I am in constant hiding.. I just need someone to tell me it is okay.. There is no need to continue to hide


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    dotsA Swan I Truely Amdots
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    I lay here and I ponder the thought..
    What is true happiness?
    Where may I find true happiness within the life I am constantly treading through?

    As if a swan, so graceful and elegant,
    Yet underneath the body of water,
    This swan is paddling with everything she has.
    Just to stay afloat

    Yet we only see her beauty
    And what she represents...

    Elegance we all wish to achieve
    Gracefulness we all want to be seen as

    Her imperfections are there, yet no one takes the effort to see them
    Only her outer appearance matters

    A life of decent and denial
    Nothing but posing and pretending

    Everything within this swan's life has become such a burden
    All she can do is continue to paddle
    And pray her poor legs do not give in.







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      I do personally still believe that it is Grace that can give us happiness,

    still this piece was true in that we are all very human and to be human we are creatures that interpret everything in what we see and feel.

    Unfortunately there isn't enough of things to see and understand that have us feeling better,

    always blessings in the rain though, and that energy, paddling feet underneath the water, creates such a beautiful ideal on top of the water.

    I really enjoyed how thought provoking this piece was.

    Wonderful, thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-11-02 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      we often don't see what is happening underneath...

    the facade presented is happy and cheerful and maintaining...

    the real person dying inside...

    like Karen Carpenter...who knew what she was really going through? poor girl, such a voice...

    and gone at 32...like plath gone at 30---much too young..

    put on a happy face like a clown...but the sadness saturates deeply through the skin into the heart.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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