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    dots Submission Name: Frugal dots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 415/433/130
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFrugal dots
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    which words were borrowed from
    your mouth?

    which whispers did your fingers
    first press upon?

    how have I strayed so far
    from your arm's
    length?

    we were happy once
    with so little

    fingers brushing against
    fingers

    a tear held back

    now you cannot see me
    when I wave my arms

    now I cannot hear you
    no matter how you shout




    Submitted on 2011-10-27 14:51:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      that's a shame. communication is something we all seem to struggle with around here but it's terrible when things get to a point of people screaming or becoming violent in any manner. i guess it doesn't even have to be in a conventional sense either, frugal works. sometimes it's economics. i guess with less we tend to focus on those lesser things, but with all the other time and resources for stimulation the finger-tips brushing/hand holding excitement loses it's luster quite quickly. it's probably all a good argument to take things slow.
    | Posted on 2011-12-20 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that. "we were happy with so little"

    seems to start off that way..then the expectations, the disappointment and thus the distance...

    this is frugal with words, but rich in meaning...

    and can light different paths for the reader.

    good stuff, Jane.
    | Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      yes....like isabella, I miss the hand-holding too...and this piece also made me think of that...."fingers brushing against fingers..." can be just as sexy as kissing....

    not to be seen or heard anymore....it has nothing to do with voices or eyes.....

    nice write....

    | Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      honestly, the biggest thing i missed about not being in a relationship was hand holding. hand touching. hand talking.

    i don't ever want to forget the simple of that right now. before life gets a hold of me and i take it for granted. i don't want to take any of it for granted today.

    i am not sure when my ex and i stopped talking or handholding. i do remember when it got to the point that we no longer saw eachother. and we probably both arm waved. i say we because i think we were both to blame in certain areas. looking back at it all now. idk.

    i came to the conclusion that loving shouldn't be so hard. it just shouldn't.

    anyhoo...

    just some thoughts that came up.
    | Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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