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    dots Submission Name: Dead Lovedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Spoof/Passion
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    dotsDead Lovedots
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    Our lives began to intertwine on a brisk day in February,
    We were inseparable,
    Constantly wrapped within one another’s embrace
    Our emotions soared...
    Soon our love blossomed into a flower with absolutely no imperfections
    Each evening we saw this flower sparkle for we'd greet one another with a kiss
    This love we shared, soon expressed with our intimacy
    Making love ... and we become whole ... as if two different souls did not exist
    My naked body pressed against yours
    Our love would only grow from here on out..

    Yet, something changed...
    This perfectly formed flower had just a speck of imperfection within it,
    We saw this... Yet we could not acknowledge what was to come..
    Not yet..

    However, this speck of imperfection began to consumer our flower
    Like a cancer... Eating away at our life support of our love!
    A plague we could not stop!

    Soon what began out to be so beautiful and perfect?
    Ended up being a lifeless, wilted flower with nothing left to give




    Submitted on 2011-10-27 18:13:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow another very well written piece that i can very much relate to. Very raw and passionate. I have found all that i have read of your writing so far to be this way. I love the titles and they draw me from the start to the end of your pieces... my poem deafening silence was based upon a love that you describe here and it is a shocking reality to have to face. I would like to add that one day you will find someone who truly loves you, respects and appreciates the beautiful person that you and that shines through these lovely pieces of writing.. keep writing and never give up for there is light to be found at the end of that very long tunnel..stormy
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Very personal and brave:
    I especially like the way you used the image of the flower as a visual for the love you shared.
    | Posted on 2011-10-27 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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