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Submission Name:
4 doors down
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Author:
Dead Bell
ASL Info:
23/m/Ire
Elite Ratio:
2.42 - 48/129/125
Words:
103
Class/Type:
Poetry/Misc
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4 doors down
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There is an apple tree four doors down from me
In overgrown gardens
I have the blood of misery in a glass prison
Overgrown gardens drown in misery
tree of blood and glass
I am surrounded by the apples in the shadowy sun
Blood and glass are all in the apples
doors opening in me
I have the overgrown roots of shadows
Doors are opening among the roots
shadows of apples drown
I have no misery in me like that of the apple tree
four doors down
away from the leaves of the sun
Submitted on 2011-10-28 11:50:12
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Yep! Just got bored
| Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by
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Is this the one you were saying were one line flows into the next?
| Posted on 2011-10-28 00:00:00 | by
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