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Submission Name: 4 doors down dots

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Author:	Dead Bell
ASL Info:	23/m/Ire
Elite Ratio:	2.42 - 48/129/125
Words:	103

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	704
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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4 doors down dots

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There is an apple tree four doors down from me
In overgrown gardens
I have the blood of misery in a glass prison

Overgrown gardens drown in misery
tree of blood and glass
I am surrounded by the apples in the shadowy sun

Blood and glass are all in the apples
doors opening in me
I have the overgrown roots of shadows

Doors are opening among the roots
shadows of apples drown
I have no misery in me like that of the apple tree

four doors down
away from the leaves of the sun

Submitted on 2011-10-28 11:50:12 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Yep! Just got bored
| Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by Dead Bell | [ Reply to This ]
Is this the one you were saying were one line flows into the next?
| Posted on 2011-10-28 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]

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