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    dots Submission Name: 4 doors downdots
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    Author: Dead Bell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Ire
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 48/129/125
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    There is an apple tree four doors down from me
    In overgrown gardens
    I have the blood of misery in a glass prison

    Overgrown gardens drown in misery
    tree of blood and glass
    I am surrounded by the apples in the shadowy sun

    Blood and glass are all in the apples
    doors opening in me
    I have the overgrown roots of shadows

    Doors are opening among the roots
    shadows of apples drown
    I have no misery in me like that of the apple tree

    four doors down
    away from the leaves of the sun




    Submitted on 2011-10-28 11:50:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yep! Just got bored
    | Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by Dead Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this the one you were saying were one line flows into the next?
    | Posted on 2011-10-28 00:00:00 | by Wolfwatching | [ Reply to This ]


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