[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Halloweandots

    Author: Runes
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 790/815/281
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 392
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 861


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    I have skeletons that rattle behind doors
    that I've nailed closed. Throwing rocks
    and screaming SHUT THE FUCK UP! is more my style; I deal
    with Nothing, avoid those hallways, keep to my own
    tomb, wrap my shroud tight against the wind
    that exposes any decay... I am frightfully Intact
    despite the holes in my skin, veiled against
    daylight's ugly exposures, pretty in think and well-suited
    to midnight actions. I live large
    in a frame that is small enough to slide
    through the cracks of the system.
    I am a name you see often, a girl you see little,
    a woman you know nothing about

    dried blood and a smear of lipstick
    bite marks on a white shoulder
    a check-mate no one wins
    just words

    Submitted on 2011-10-28 21:35:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      "... I am frightfully Intact
    despite the holes in my skin,"

    I feel this so deeply. Not just that part of the stanza but the whole of it. The whole poem.

    I have some lines that I pulled out of a recent poem,

    "On TV I'd be over this by now.
    Or at least by the new season"

    I don't know if I'll ever find a place for them, but they somehow seemed to fit how I felt after this.

    And so the women that people "know nothing about" stuff these monsters at the back behind the size "0" jeans, and the size 12 jeans, and Grandmother's scarves. Like they can't hurt us from there. And when they start to bang and rattle we yell. Yes, we yell, "SHUT THE FUCK UP!".

    I agree with Jacob, though. I would spell the words out. How else will the skeletons (and such) hear them?

    | Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      so many good lines...don't like the text STFU part...

    but "pretty in think"
    "a name you see often/ the girl you see little"
    very very neat line..
    "the check mate no one wins"

    great ending...just that one glitch for me...

    i keep to myself and i want to be left alone, yet i want to be noticed.

    intriguing write, Runes

    | Posted on 2011-10-28 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Fasade written by jackz
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    AI written by poetotoe
    True Death written by layDsayD
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Bond written by saartha
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Linger written by saartha
    Push written by JanePlane
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    written by Daniel Barlow




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]