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    dots Submission Name: Halloweandots
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    Author: Runes
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    Words: 139
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    dotsHalloweandots
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    I have skeletons that rattle behind doors
    that I've nailed closed. Throwing rocks
    and screaming SHUT THE FUCK UP! is more my style; I deal
    with Nothing, avoid those hallways, keep to my own
    tomb, wrap my shroud tight against the wind
    that exposes any decay... I am frightfully Intact
    despite the holes in my skin, veiled against
    daylight's ugly exposures, pretty in think and well-suited
    to midnight actions. I live large
    in a frame that is small enough to slide
    through the cracks of the system.
    I am a name you see often, a girl you see little,
    a woman you know nothing about

    dried blood and a smear of lipstick
    bite marks on a white shoulder
    a check-mate no one wins
    just words
    just
    words.





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      "... I am frightfully Intact
    despite the holes in my skin,"

    I feel this so deeply. Not just that part of the stanza but the whole of it. The whole poem.

    I have some lines that I pulled out of a recent poem,

    "On TV I'd be over this by now.
    Or at least by the new season"

    I don't know if I'll ever find a place for them, but they somehow seemed to fit how I felt after this.

    And so the women that people "know nothing about" stuff these monsters at the back behind the size "0" jeans, and the size 12 jeans, and Grandmother's scarves. Like they can't hurt us from there. And when they start to bang and rattle we yell. Yes, we yell, "SHUT THE FUCK UP!".

    I agree with Jacob, though. I would spell the words out. How else will the skeletons (and such) hear them?

    Jane
    | Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      so many good lines...don't like the text STFU part...

    but "pretty in think"
    "a name you see often/ the girl you see little"
    very very neat line..
    "the check mate no one wins"

    great ending...just that one glitch for me...

    i keep to myself and i want to be left alone, yet i want to be noticed.

    intriguing write, Runes

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-28 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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