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    dots Submission Name: hurtdots

    Author: Outlaw
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 510/413/195
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I don't even want to rationalize my way out of this state. That's probably the worst bit.

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    It isnít enough to speak the words
    To breathe the soft tones of my life
    Into the fragile winces of your fingers

    My cheeks are stalactites to be

    And our once soaring butterfly
    Nothing more than an architectural relic
    Frozen in the datolite of a cave to be

    Submitted on 2011-10-28 22:19:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    This is heart wrenchingly beautiful. I am always thrown by the beauty that comes from such sorrow. It seems almost morbid to say how eloquent and breathtakingly beautiful ones broken soul's cries are. Yet, all the classics are either bound to one or broken from another.

    You have done that here, placed pain and anguish on the page.

    Stunning...beautifully broken.

    | Posted on 2014-05-22 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]

    yeah buddy that's not good man. let time do it's thing(even that thing where it seems like time does nothing) but you're usually the rationalizing type. i wouldn't let something take you down or keep you caved forever.
    | Posted on 2011-11-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      This to me is elegant in it's delivery yet appears to be layered, as if a pain is inherent in all expressed yet it is much greater than it is perceived to be initially. It is as if some form of dignity is retained through the way this is delivered yet the pain is major upon closer inspection, I enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]

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