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    dots Submission Name: Mercury morningdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMercury morningdots
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    Another mercury morning,
    I think of words sometimes
    and needs existing as thirsts
    for mayhem and destruction
    to spill over my pain,
    for silence and cold to hold me
    no more..

    I taste the thought, you think I can't?
    polarity is a cursed word in this,
    this remnant of a meted cause,
    this bow stapled to my arteries
    turning my blood to strawberry fields
    burning at sunset.

    I could write anything I wish, all over, anywhere,
    to try exorcise the demons and tears,
    but nothing can shut off the burning tide
    of a mutinous heart no longer here,
    sleeping on the tip of love's turning spear..

    Svw




    Submitted on 2011-10-29 04:38:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I could write anything I wish, all over, anywhere,"

    Yes. And do it over and over with as many words as will come.

    Pointed words like the tip of a spear. Or pleading words like thirst and pain spilling.

    And still in the end it is almost a question: "Why?"

    Or maybe: "How do I make it stop?"

    It seems to be begging for answers.

    It seems so earnest.

    If only the answers would come . . .

    Jane
    | Posted on 2011-10-30 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the quiet agony of the ending... the peaceful quiet swirly Completeness of balancing on the spear tip... the only pressure is the weight of going down.

    Gravity and Love sucks.
    | Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      nice images.

    careful..it's "can't" in that line.

    i get this feeling of not being able to write it out..no matter what i write, no matter what style..i can't squell the burning feeling..i can't douse the fire...

    i keep writing hoping that i will cool down...i just keep writing and writing...maybe i should just pick some of the strawberries...and throw them against the wall...like Jude did in "Across the Universe."

    this cornered me into myself nicely.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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