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    dots Submission Name: Wish They Woulddots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWish They Woulddots
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    They say my adversaries,
    Are my worst downfall;
    Contrary from bodies,
    Filling cemeteries,
    All I can say is,
    I forgive them all.

    Never been afraid,
    I'm timid,
    Fear lives here not;
    Though my structure is rigid,
    I've laid ideas to plot,
    And still managed to stay legit.

    That's why you see me,
    Plotting and scheming;
    Even though life is incredibly,
    All about,
    Shouting and screaming.

    I'm not that perfect,
    Death threats are dropped,
    They forefeit,
    Yet I wish they would,
    Will they soon kill me?
    Only when I stop,
    Knocking on wood.
    Feel me.




    Submitted on 2011-10-31 15:37:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is really good.
    and what an ending...perfect...

    i especially like the "i've laid ideas to plot/ and still managed to stay legit"

    this poem could be about poems/writing or about adversaries in the human form and dealing with death and forgiveness...

    really moving...

    "only when i stop knocking on wood/ feel me"

    wow.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-10-31 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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