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    dots Submission Name: My beautiful cursedots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy beautiful cursedots

    I am a visage of thoughts condensed,
    a matrix of potentials bound by
    solitary viewpoints and understandings
    unfathomable to the distracted seekers
    waltzing through cycles of self perpetuals,
    calling this "normal".

    This world is a collection of
    differentiation and pointing fingers,
    fed and fed again to the empty mouths
    growing hungrily from its soil,
    caught up in spinning layers
    and colors yet unseen.

    A constant stream of screams float
    through this place,
    calling me to open my box of ideas
    and change the sun's light to
    something more visible,
    cutting into me as I taste
    after certainty and truth,
    looking for something to grasp and feel..

    A denial of impossibility
    I carry between these un-sheathed eyes,
    to unfold upon this plane
    a place to sit and watch
    cold sheets crumble from skin and
    old hearts melting away,
    exposing the reasons
    for being here...


    Submitted on 2011-11-01 18:33:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i kind of feel like the first verse could sum up consciousness for many. not taken with a dark tone that is. seems very soul searching. that's good.
    | Posted on 2011-11-03 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this and want to come back to it for a more detailed review...but that line "change the sun's light to something more visible"

    reminds me of poetry and the idea some have of keeping it real..too real, too blunt...not allowing for some abstract thinking...

    just saw that...poets are so minsunderstood most of the time anyway..i mean in terms of them being misunderstood no matter the words...
    oh, "hungrily from its soil"

    but nice line too...

    i enjoy your writes...they let me drift. i like to drift.

    | Posted on 2011-11-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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