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    dots Submission Name: Day and Nightdots

    Author: CynicalxDreamer
    ASL Info:    31/m/7th Level of Hell
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 40/100/64
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 770
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       A short poem made for someone who was having a bad day. Spur of the moment, I still liked it.

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    dotsDay and Nightdots

    A voice cried out
    Into the darkness
    Looking westward
    For the sun had long since sank

    The pervading blackness
    Echoed through the soul
    Touching the dark spots
    Calling brother to brother

    The voice spoke again
    Looking into the gloom
    Speaking of no solace
    In the vast twilight

    For all was fallen
    All beneath the veil
    Until another voice
    Called back in reply

    'Shadows always give way'
    'Light will return'
    'Look east for the next day'
    'For it will come with the morn'

    And the lonesome voice
    Saw with time
    The light push back the shade
    Retreating like phantasms

    But that voice paused
    Then asked
    'The light has come'
    'But I can still see darkness'

    And was told
    'They are one and the same'
    'One begets the other'
    'In an eternal struggle'
    'That helps define our existence'

    'So do not dwell on darkness'
    'Nor stare too long into light'
    'Instead, find a middle ground'
    'To exist, betwixt day and night'

    'For that is what is to live'
    'Both in tones of grey, black, and white'
    'A canvas touched by all colors of life'
    'For all days have a night'

    Submitted on 2011-11-02 11:44:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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