Description: i opologise in advance for this. its about a dream i had last night. its a poem but it reads more like a really bad story. but it says what i intended to say enen if its not very good
entiseing night -------------------------------------------
reality called again tonight
the old man looking as good as ever
wearing his brown suit and shoes
his unthreatening face looks hopefully at me
i slowly close the door
i will not leave with him this night
he calmly walks away showing no emotion
i settle down once more infront of the fire
open my book to where i left of and continue on
knock, knock the door again
a beautiful young woman stands before me
the bottom of her dress so high every movement reveals her black velvet underwear
she look at me seductively
useing her good looks to entise me into the night
i quickly close the door an walk away
lady lust will not take me tonight
before i can leave the door goes again
i open it and see a tall dark man
he wears dark sneakers and long black jeans slightly baggy at the bottom
his shirt is slightly open at both ends and covered by a full lenth leather coat that flows out behind him as he wanders around the door way
he comes up to me
takes off his shades and stares into my eyes
they are so similar to mine yet their passion has been replaced with greed
this dream will not take me away
so back to the book again to wait for my next caller to try and entise me away into the night
Poe was scary. I feel like a orange. except maybe an orange that was sanded down and made smooth.. Mmmm smooth orange. Good job, it flows well, and basically it's just written fairly well, Now maybe I can't tell you much about your own poetry, because I don't understand it.
Hmm... do you mean "entice" this is very interesting. I like your personifications of these emotions. This seems to me to be a very well written poem, that flows beautifully.
Submission Name: entiseing night
