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    dots Submission Name: entiseing nightdots
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    Author: nameless_nobody
    ASL Info:    18 in a few days.
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 333/421/67
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1469
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    Description:
       i opologise in advance for this. its about a dream i had last night. its a poem but it reads more like a really bad story. but it says what i intended to say enen if its not very good


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    dotsentiseing nightdots
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    reality called again tonight
    the old man looking as good as ever
    wearing his brown suit and shoes
    his unthreatening face looks hopefully at me
    i slowly close the door
    i will not leave with him this night
    he calmly walks away showing no emotion

    i settle down once more infront of the fire
    open my book to where i left of and continue on
    knock, knock the door again
    a beautiful young woman stands before me
    the bottom of her dress so high every movement reveals her black velvet underwear
    she look at me seductively
    useing her good looks to entise me into the night
    i quickly close the door an walk away
    lady lust will not take me tonight

    before i can leave the door goes again
    i open it and see a tall dark man
    he wears dark sneakers and long black jeans slightly baggy at the bottom
    his shirt is slightly open at both ends and covered by a full lenth leather coat that flows out behind him as he wanders around the door way
    he comes up to me
    takes off his shades and stares into my eyes
    they are so similar to mine yet their passion has been replaced with greed
    this dream will not take me away

    so back to the book again to wait for my next caller to try and entise me away into the night




    Submitted on 2004-07-31 08:44:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Poe was scary. I feel like a orange. except maybe an orange that was sanded down and made smooth.. Mmmm smooth orange. Good job, it flows well, and basically it's just written fairly well, Now maybe I can't tell you much about your own poetry, because I don't understand it.
    | Posted on 2004-07-31 00:00:00 | by Das_Ein_Sinender | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... do you mean "entice" this is very interesting. I like your personifications of these emotions. This seems to me to be a very well written poem, that flows beautifully.
    | Posted on 2004-07-31 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]


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