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    dots Submission Name: Change In WEatherdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    dotsChange In WEatherdots

    Somber cloudz
    moving slowly
    to settle
    like a mood

    Bird song
    as cloudz
    release tears
    of renewal

    to green

    My thirst
    is parchment

    Drops of energy
    seasons change

    In ALL

    Submitted on 2011-11-03 21:31:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as cloudz
    release tears
    of renewal

    Love that...not that the "whole" was not a beautiful piece...but that....it has such special meaning. Good stuff

    | Posted on 2011-11-08 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      You make me feel the changing of mood from melancholy to life renewal through the spiritual. While Change starts on a down note which can be a little difficult to get into, it ends on a high that leaves me feeling good. Separately, I tried accessing the business journal article but did not because a paid subscription is required to read the entire article. I find business interesting because I've had several businesses over the years. If you will send your business site address, I will take a look - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-11-05 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This first stanza is really powerful to me.
    I have heard a lot of moods compared this way, and I think that it precedes the second stanza very well too because of that truth you point out about the renewing rain.

    And I enjoy your structure, it slows the reader down and the way that it does this creates a very soothing flow.
    | Posted on 2011-11-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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