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    dots Submission Name: Change In WEatherdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 617
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    Somber cloudz
    hang
    moving slowly
    to settle
    like a mood
    introverted

    Bird song
    releases
    melancholy
    as cloudz
    release tears
    of renewal

    Landscape
    drinks
    to green
    effervescent

    My thirst
    is parchment


    Drops of energy
    quenching
    Spiritual
    seasons change

    In ALL
    Illuminated
    Exchange...




    Submitted on 2011-11-03 21:31:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      as cloudz
    release tears
    of renewal


    Love that...not that the "whole" was not a beautiful piece...but that....it has such special meaning. Good stuff



    Denise
    | Posted on 2011-11-08 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      You make me feel the changing of mood from melancholy to life renewal through the spiritual. While Change starts on a down note which can be a little difficult to get into, it ends on a high that leaves me feeling good. Separately, I tried accessing the business journal article but did not because a paid subscription is required to read the entire article. I find business interesting because I've had several businesses over the years. If you will send your business site address, I will take a look - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-11-05 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This first stanza is really powerful to me.
    I have heard a lot of moods compared this way, and I think that it precedes the second stanza very well too because of that truth you point out about the renewing rain.

    And I enjoy your structure, it slows the reader down and the way that it does this creates a very soothing flow.
    | Posted on 2011-11-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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