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    dots Submission Name: Crimson Bathdots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 682
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    Description:
       A poem i wrote for someone who I love but atlas his love does not belong to me....


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    dotsCrimson Bathdots
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    I filled this bathtub with tears
    and as the water began to turn crimson
    my knife imprinted little letters in my skin
    N O M O R E
    turned black from my pain

    her hands you held
    her lips you kissed
    leaving gashes in my heart
    but a temptress is so alluring
    and so cruel this night is loneliness

    I held my own hand in the darkness
    pleading that when I open my eyes that you'd still be there,
    but nothing is what it seemed
    we all held our breath as we told lies
    hoping that they'd somehow manifest themselves to truth.

    Truth hurts so much more
    pain is only momentary
    abusing cruelty like addicts
    turning to one another to fight and hurt each other always the same never changing

    I saw us holding hands, we were so old
    but I have always been delusional
    like you have always been lost
    and on this night in my crimson bath
    I let it swallow me, the visions of you and her
    and as they do I realize that I have cried my tears dry and my heart no longer aches

    there is hope, I just can't hope that this temptress will leave us
    forever I lie in sadness at his memory
    but a new day dawns,
    just like love changing forevermore,
    and forever shall I love him!






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