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    dots Submission Name: Forgotten dots

    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       To my grandma who we will love even long after we are forgotten......

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    dotsForgotten dots

    A monster swooped down and took her soul
    swallowing her mind leaving her so confused
    a simple task takes hours
    and that glass is gone done passed.

    she walks along a lonely road
    confusing night and day
    a world she once understood
    has now gone completely gray.

    she was young and vibrant at one time
    a clad iron memory
    that could not be stolen in the night
    but time ticks on as darkness takes over all the the light.

    what once was strong now lost
    seems a shame to me
    but my tears can not change it
    nor erase what was never meant to be.

    tell me that I can close my eyes
    that I can turn away
    I know I can't ,
    what and who will be forgotten today?

    Submitted on 2011-11-05 22:44:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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