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Alcohol bingo


Author: Temidayo
ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
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Wrong high


Alcohol bingo



come n ger it!

alcohol bingo

get ur vision in a blur,


make your voice more 1 step from drawl to a slurr,

alazea, Rosay, henney n moet

pink lady,magaritta nice chiquita




here's a chance to lose coherence,

aye never cringe,


indulge in this binge,

2 nite's treat;all u can drink if ur life's a flop.


Aye! comrade bottoms up,

claim your good when u aint

cos u all bad


end up in the gutter

thats sad...Alcohol bingo




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  Personally I think alcohol is wonderful stuff so long as it's not abused. To end up drunk and in the gutter certainly represents a failed day. Such is medicine, strong medicine and should be treated as such. Aside from that I have something of a religious feeling/practice about the use of it which implies that it's something to have a healthy respect for. Properly used, it's also good for health to both calm the nerves and kill excess and/or harmful bacteria. It's not without reason that it is called "spirits".

Your poem is quite good in both content and message. Undoubtedly you have witnessed the abuse that is so common with the substance. "Get ur vision in a blur" That is the difference between someone's having a mindset of indulging himself and serving the devil as opposed to a mindset of serving God. Here's a good article I found that kind of sums up my own feelings: http://www.justforcatholics.org/a106.htm
| Posted on 2012-05-06 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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