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    dots Submission Name: Truth Songdots

    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Our truths will find a way to the surface no matter how much we resist.

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    dotsTruth Songdots

    My truths
    Thoughtful whispers
    Linking soul-scapes to mind space
    Weaving textured voices
    In undulating polyphony
    Who can know these careful themes
    as they filter past
    protective oversight?

    Guardian Undertaker
    Underlines the rules
    Checks my dreams at the door
    Erases any hint of over-reaching
    As I, mired in understatement
    Learn my place
    And smother the whispers

    Still truths stir
    Free willed messengers
    Leaking heartache through dreamscapes
    Sounding drumbeat rhythms
    In overwhelming synchrony
    Who can hide the sequence
    pounding past propriety?

    Guardian Undertaker
    Overrides the rules
    Makes way for
    Truth catchers with
    Pens poised to underscore
    As I, mired in overwhelm
    Find my place
    And listen

    November , 2011

    Submitted on 2011-11-08 19:57:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So many spots here found me....for a total and complete love of this. What a beautiful way with words you have...you had me at "thoughtful whispers"
    | Posted on 2011-11-09 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      nice piece..especially the following lines:

    "linking soul scapes to mind space"

    and "as I, mired in overwhelm"

    this is like what poets do..tell the truth...

    the good ones don't mire the truth in fancy language...just tell it like it is...

    i attached to this piece

    | Posted on 2011-11-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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