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wept for you


Author: scardnscared
ASL Info:    25/ DFW
Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585 /498 /311
Words: 221
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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wept for you



she stood there
and let the waves crash upon her feet
she just kept looking out towards the sea
replaying memories and weeping
the tears they made no sound
and the memories were tearing her apart
she just wanted to feel normal again
not like she had been ripped in two
how was she to know that when she met you
that you would become the biggest part of her world
she was so proud when you signed up
bragged that you were defending us
and then almost died when your ship blew up
the world grieved, the world forgot about the little girl on the coast
she was looked over as we all mourned for the loss of our sons
she blamed god for her loss
and wished for the devil to swallow her up
she stood there
and let the waves crash over her head
she closed her eyes and saw your face
and for the first time in a while she smiled
but soon she couldn't breathe
and she realized that this was her mistake
she wanted to live but it was to late
the current had pulled her away from us
the ocean swallowed her up
and today we mourn for the sweet girl
who wept with us, who wept for us
who wept for you..




Submitted on 2011-11-09 19:35:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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