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    dots Submission Name: The Problemdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Problemdots
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    There is a taste to uncertainty
    like liquid questioning depth
    a substance that goes down so smoothly into the abyss
    And back up stubbornly like indigestion

    Until it hits the caverns of my abdomen
    to be devoured by acid intentions,
    often quite painfully

    It is this sense of control and these thoughts that provoke a conflict between every physical particle
    every imagined ideal

    Residing in my reactions
    And planting seeds of diverse concern




    Submitted on 2011-11-10 09:38:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is something i can relate to, for sure. love how you use indigestion to explain the reaction of the uncertainty. where stress, confusion and anxiety take over. a wall to overcome to project and live change.
    | Posted on 2011-11-16 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. what a metaphor..and so nicely sustained throughout the piece.

    uncertainty gives me indigestion too.

    in fact often when i am in the midst of it, i won't eat at all...too busy worrying the outcome.

    nice write, jazmine.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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