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There is a taste to uncertainty
like liquid questioning depth
a substance that goes down so smoothly into the abyss
And back up stubbornly like indigestion
Until it hits the caverns of my abdomen
to be devoured by acid intentions,
often quite painfully
It is this sense of control and these thoughts that provoke a conflict between every physical particle
every imagined ideal
Residing in my reactions
And planting seeds of diverse concern
Submitted on 2011-11-10 09:38:15
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this is something i can relate to, for sure. love how you use indigestion to explain the reaction of the uncertainty. where stress, confusion and anxiety take over. a wall to overcome to project and live change.
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wow. what a metaphor..and so nicely sustained throughout the piece.
uncertainty gives me indigestion too.
in fact often when i am in the midst of it, i won't eat at all...too busy worrying the outcome.
nice write, jazmine.
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