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    dots Submission Name: Warning!! don't read too much poetrydots

    Author: SHRINKSDR
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 476/375/39
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsWarning!! don't read too much poetrydots

    I’ll sit and write a poem real quick.
    But first which topic should I pick?
    Flowers will do, for oddly enough
    Women really love that stuff!

    They’ll see me as a romantic man
    Will love me and want to hold my hand.
    I’ll be the darling of Elite Poetry
    Ladies from England will invite me to tea!

    So without any further ado
    I wrote this one just for you!

    My love is like red red rose
    That’s newly sprung in June

    Oh! Wait a minute! This isn’t mine.
    This happens each and every time
    When an old poem I read returns.
    Dam, that sucks! That really Burns.

    I however remain undaunted
    Begin again about Birds quite haunted
    Everyone likes our fine feathered friends
    And a write like this will achieve my ends.

    Once upon a midnight dreary
    While I pondered weak and weary

    My fist to heaven is ragefully wavein’
    Well, no use in this ranting and Raven.
    Aha! Now I have it, I’ll write an epic
    That tells a story so very heroic

    Half a league, half a league,
    Half a league onward,
    All in the valley Death
    Rode the six hundred

    Crap! Must be careful for I am afraid,
    I’ll provoke a Charge of the Poetry Brigade.
    Sorry to all, for wasting your time.
    Too many poems are on my mind.

    My muse has left – not my choice
    So here I sit without a voice
    And so now I must say a’dieu
    And wish a good night to all of you

    Good night, good night! parting is such sweet sorrow,

    Awh shit! I quit!!!!

    Submitted on 2011-11-10 13:48:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ha!! Let me just say...

    Thanks for posting this one, as it has made me smile on this cool autumn day! Every writer will surely relate and understand this one for sure! Writing can be very frustrating, especially when you have writers block, which apparently I have had for sometime now...

    Great enjoyable poem this one is! Hope you find your muse again, or at least, I hope your muse finds you!

    Hopefully mine returns one of these days too!

    | Posted on 2011-11-21 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      i really got a kick out of this piece...it reminds me of what it must be like for artists to write songs..how to refrain from coming up with that which has already been used as lyrics.

    i think often we are relegated to using the same words...i guess it is the individual twists we are able to put on the phrasing.

    cliché is sometimes quite hard to avoid because the emotions that drive poets to write poems are timeless...and over the centuries pretty much the same.

    we can only try to be as creative as possible...

    but the influence of what we heard, what we've read...it is there, no denying...

    and yet if we don't read a lot of poetry, the inspiration is often missing to do our own wordplay...

    i like the playfulness of this piece and yet there is much truth in it.

    | Posted on 2011-11-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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