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    dots Submission Name: Plastic Bagdots
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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 636
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    Description:
       Sometimes I feel this way....especially when I want to zone out and escape...Still in the end, I am always earthbound.


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    dotsPlastic Bagdots
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    Cast off
    Passed on
    Let go
    Flee
    Flowing boundless
    Aimlessly

    Careless Creature
    Trip and spill
    Wrap and founder
    Flutter fill

    Makeshift flight
    On autumn winds
    Lifting upward
    Cart-wheeling

    Light, unfettered
    Whip and whirl
    Catch and tether
    Tear and twirl

    Wind blown full
    Embrace the sky
    Inside outside
    Upside fly

    Brilliant blue on
    Golden leaves
    Soaring freely
    Past the trees

    Blend translucent
    Shear and soar
    Plunging playful
    Kiss the shore

    Dance on waves of
    Ocean foam
    Clip on cliffs
    Contained then thrown

    Journey forwardly
    Unbend
    Carry on
    ‘til journey’s end

    Open ended
    Wayward ways
    Back to Earth
    On Earth
    Remain


    ew61
    November 10, 2011




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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed this too. Plastic bags drifting in a wind will always be connected to a British programme called The League of Gentlemen. I can relate to this feeling as well. I wrote a poem called Feather in which I say I feel like "A slave to the breeze." Critically, the clipped lines work well, but they don't exactly make me think of anything soaring in an updraft, but changing it would totally change the feel of the piece.

    Amy
    | Posted on 2011-11-11 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      okay i like this...and this will be a very lame critique...no..not critique...just a comment.

    i saw this poem as a leaf falling from a tree in fall...and there is just enough breeze to make it twirl and dance as it heads for the ground.

    and yes, like a plastic bag...same effect...but i feel like that leaf often enough...being pushed and pulled and lifted and dragged down by life.

    someone needs to weigh the leaf down...so it can stay grounded.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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