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    dots Submission Name: Funeral for Old Habitationdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFuneral for Old Habitationdots
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    I have projected the figures to unanimously raise my concerns for everything
    But
    things that pricelessly mattered prior to
    my merciful breathtaking hesitation
    Have slayed the beast

    Forwarded by fears I have regretted my Self Serving worries
    And Idolizing Fear

    I have made every effort to Castrate this independant and ugly part of my self

    Still,
    it must decay
    And the vessels of travel have grown close to me
    ripping apart now, most painfully
    decomposing quickly but casting from body, a scream
    only heard in the most spiritual realms
    and almost confronted
    by
    very nearly braked
    by
    the fear of change




    Submitted on 2011-11-12 09:10:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very insightful piece dealing with introspection...hard to just cut off the bad parts of us cleanly..we sever tham gradually.

    and we gradually gain concern for people and things as we grow older i think...

    everything matters more...getting rid of the old selves if necessary...is painful...and part of us will always have those limbs.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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