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    dots Submission Name: The Jauntdots

    Author: Anju
    ASL Info:    25/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 24/27/15
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Jauntdots

    Rang the bells of excitement
    As dawn crept in through curtain's vent;
    Popped out from the blanket snout
    A smiling face - for it's girls-day-out!

    Bags and pouches stuffed with goodies
    Clad & ready to count miles with buddies;
    We venture with stride and free bird's pride-
    For the adventure in store all through the ride.

    Teasing each other and pulling legs
    The carriage now tingles with chuckles and giggles
    Each passing moment murmurs in our ears-
    "Gifted are we with great pals for years".

    Glimmering satins & shimmering stones
    Shopped with shades of passion and haste
    Speaks a new story for each of us-
    By weaving us all in a single string.

    The dawn soon slips to dusk in jiffy
    Gifting an album of rare memories
    Clasping on them I pout under my blanket
    Wishing to relive those moments of jaunt.

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