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    dots Submission Name: Cold Winter Behinddots

    Author: xxalpal4everzxx
    ASL Info:    13/F/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 10/26/19
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsCold Winter Behinddots

    His gorgeous eyes just staring at me,
    If only my love oh he could see,
    The rain drops fall from heaven,
    Where he comes from my sweet Kevin,
    Miles and miles of teardrops came before,
    It seemed before him my heart was at war,
    Yet the second I started talking to him,
    I knew, that long cold war my heart would win,
    As I stare into his light blue eyes,
    My head forgets all the lies,
    As our lips touch and I feel him around me,
    His angelicness is all Iíll ever see
    I want this love to be worth it,
    I just donít want it to be perfect,
    Look into my eyes,
    Take out all the lies.

    Submitted on 2011-11-14 19:21:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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