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    dots Submission Name: darknessdots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsdarknessdots
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    the rust is building

    water swirling 'round the drain

    the cacophony climbs in decibels

    and the smells compound

    the trash is building up

    and the creeps are crawling out

    the bile rises in the pipes

    and rot eats through the wood

    the ants are marching in to war

    with the corpse upon on the floor




    Submitted on 2011-11-15 01:35:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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