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    dots Submission Name: Lecture Poems: Set 2dots

    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Another short set of poems written during lectures.
    1. Written during a very boring presentation on peacemaking processes.
    2. Written during a repeat of a lecture on nuclear deterrence.

    There's a little bit of text arrangement for these that I can't figure out how to do on ES. It's not really important, but you can see it here: http://saartha.deviantart.com/#/d4gapp3

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLecture Poems: Set 2dots

    1. In its entirety, the universe
    circles about with snapping jaws.
    Waiting to be eaten, I lie
    still at night, stiff
    as the carapace of love.

    The only sound
    the sucking of eyelids.
    The only movement my throat,
    its murmuration of starlings.

    2. The mountains waded
    knee-deep in wild grain.
    I moved deep into them, they asked
    do you hate them no only
    the heavy etch of fingerprints do you
    aspire to oceans no only
    their uncertain bathometer do you
    seek succor from fear no only
    a return to myopia.

    Silent, gleaming slate blue
    in the afternoon sun,
    they opened their maw
    and took me in.

    Submitted on 2011-11-15 17:18:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like to use my own signature;
    the 'do you' & 'no only' parts make me want to go right out
    and copy that.
    | Posted on 2012-02-18 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      number 2. okay---interesting reverse beat to the rhythm...

    number 1 blew me away..perfect wording...i heard, saw and felt this piece.
    i lie still at night waiting...stiff....waiting for the universe to do its thing...and to be carried away...at its mercy..i am but waiting...waiting...

    there is a feeling of impending movement...but in what direction?

    like the questions this leaves...the hesitation.
    like a breath waiting to be exhaled...

    | Posted on 2011-11-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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