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    dots Submission Name: Unrealdots
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    Author: EW61
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 131/71/51
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I am tired of telling
    The same dreary tales
    Of shut downing
    Shout downs
    Shame blazing
    Iíve failed

    I sit here surrounded
    Cramped quarters contain
    Thwarted and stifled
    How can I remain?

    Where is the Justice?
    Canít face this alone
    Aware of my weakness
    I just want to find home

    Still bound to the story
    That christened my way
    Iíd get back my life
    If I could take back that day

    If I knew a magician
    With a trusty black wand,
    I would ask for a redo
    Or would that make me wrong?

    My path is a mystery
    I try not to feel
    But with each step
    I take forward
    The truth becomes real

    Where is the solace
    The comfort
    That heals?
    Without it Iím groundless
    And nothing feels real




    Submitted on 2011-11-17 19:36:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the first stanza unravels into a search for truth in the rest of the poem..i mean literally and figuratively...love that stanza...the wording uncoils like a snake...

    i don't know...where is justice?

    is the truth that we are doomed to failure?

    inevitable?

    or as in "shakespeare in love" it is a mystery...but in the end...good will come...solace will come..

    peace will come.

    a thoughtful write...this one is.

    i don't know about the magician and the redo..because ...magicians use slight of hand...

    and i don't think slight of mind would be real...so perhaps we just need to take what comes.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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