Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Autumndots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Wayfarer
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 280
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 571



    Description:
       Yeah... I'm a teenager :P


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAutumndots
    -------------------------------------------


    I raced across the empty land,
    The brilliance slowly passing,
    Following light across the sand,
    The shadows were amassing.
    Their sinful army at my tail,
    With sunset at my head,
    Piercing through the bitter gale,
    And running with the dead,
    My lost and loved surrounded me,
    Their terror cutting deep,
    Condemned to be forever past,
    The safe maternal keep;
    And I, who longed to rest my eyes,
    Was forced to lead them all;
    Horrorstruck at all the cries,
    I ran into the fall.




    Submitted on 2011-11-18 18:42:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      yeah, you are a teenager :P

    well, I will say that I love how you ended this piece, most of all.

    Horror struck at all the cries,
    I ran into the fall.

    Reminds me of Halloween.
    | Posted on 2011-11-20 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    193302

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Duality of Reality written by Chelebel
    Givers give, while the takers take. written by Chelebel
    what wakes me up at night written by SetmyselfonFire
    Sharper Image written by redthewitch
    Introducing: Necrohesive! written by PryncessVynom
    Catharsis 💩 written by Chelebel
    Torn-a-do written by Chelebel
    She Said I Fell Off written by Latin King
    The Grinder written by HisNameIsNoMore
    untitled written by Narna
    Once written by closetpoet
    Mid Section written by Chelebel
    Breaking Free written by Janesaddiction
    A Magic Harp written by poetotoe
    Soaring Dreams written by Ramneet
    The Saga of Indecision written by poeticscribe13
    i love you poems for him written by ankur5421
    Lunation & Lovers written by krs3332003
    eight:twenty-seven written by isabella
    My Great Divide written by Diablo Tapitio
    Poison love Chapter one written by rachelvrolyks
    again written by vedanta19
    Believe What You Want written by Chelebel
    Sonnet: Dinner of the Carnal written by HisNameIsNoMore
    War of the Sisters - Prologue - In The Beginning written by PryncessVynom
    אלול written by Ontlogicalamity
    Lanterns of the Wisps written by HisNameIsNoMore
    It Walked Between written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Fiddler written by krs3332003
    Veilleuse and Larceny written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry