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and she said yes.


Author: scardnscared
ASL Info:    25/ DFW
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Words: 256
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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a guy i work with told me the story of how he asked his wife to marry him.. it was a truly touching story and i just couldnt help but make up how it went. enjoy.


and she said yes.



i listened to her to talk
she spun a web of beauty and deceit
talked of love and loss
and all that would fall inbetween
we sat and talked for hours
not a topic under the sun we didnt cover
we tried not to watch the clock
because it was ticking down
counting the minutes and hours that we had left
and her plane ticket sat on the table mocking us
who would of known what transpired tonight
we both werent looking
but we found the light
i was afraid it would slip, but i just couldnt hold on tight
so i smiled while she rambled on for another mile
but deep inside her mind
she was crying out to me
screaming take me, love me, hold me please
her eyes they pleaded with me
but time had run out,so into the car we got
the drive was sad and quiet
my mind was still racing and flying
the gate was looming up ahead
i had to think fast, cause this couldnt be the end
so i grabbed her hand and held her tight
and these words just slipped right out of my mouth

will you marry me..

oh no what have i done?
i havent even told her i love her
and im already jumping the gun
so i start to walk away, with my face in flames
and finally the clapping breaks through
and i turn..
her face is covered and tears, and a smile
everyones telling me she said yes.




Submitted on 2011-11-18 22:49:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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