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    dots Submission Name: and she said yes.dots

    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       a guy i work with told me the story of how he asked his wife to marry him.. it was a truly touching story and i just couldnt help but make up how it went. enjoy.

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    dotsand she said yes.dots

    i listened to her to talk
    she spun a web of beauty and deceit
    talked of love and loss
    and all that would fall inbetween
    we sat and talked for hours
    not a topic under the sun we didnt cover
    we tried not to watch the clock
    because it was ticking down
    counting the minutes and hours that we had left
    and her plane ticket sat on the table mocking us
    who would of known what transpired tonight
    we both werent looking
    but we found the light
    i was afraid it would slip, but i just couldnt hold on tight
    so i smiled while she rambled on for another mile
    but deep inside her mind
    she was crying out to me
    screaming take me, love me, hold me please
    her eyes they pleaded with me
    but time had run out,so into the car we got
    the drive was sad and quiet
    my mind was still racing and flying
    the gate was looming up ahead
    i had to think fast, cause this couldnt be the end
    so i grabbed her hand and held her tight
    and these words just slipped right out of my mouth

    will you marry me..

    oh no what have i done?
    i havent even told her i love her
    and im already jumping the gun
    so i start to walk away, with my face in flames
    and finally the clapping breaks through
    and i turn..
    her face is covered and tears, and a smile
    everyones telling me she said yes.

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