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    Author: Runes
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    December plays with my mind like you
    play with my hair, a few strands wrapped up
    in a curling movement, a few wisps of fly-away
    thoughts falling like snow from the cedars
    so cold it hurts to feel
    this way.

    Bring the fiery reds from autumn, bring me
    gold mood-changing summers. Love me
    with soft April breezes, and I will stay
    throughout December, Iíll be yours
    until the freeze.




    Submitted on 2011-11-20 09:14:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what an amazing piece, runes!!! the warmth of autumn is followed by the bitter cold of winter.....and when love turns cold too, after being so warm, it's hard to pick up the pieces and look towards spring. although our hearts thaw out eventually, we never forget the barren feeling of winter's cold.

    but when someone new is able to light the flame deep within us, it can insulate us from anything....

    have missed your writing....glad you've surfaced again....
    | Posted on 2011-11-20 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      i think december and its coldness reminds us of the relationships that failed...of the people who were once warm and turned cold toward us...

    it's hard not to approach a new relationship with doubts...even when the relationship is new in its spring, hot in its summer and beautifully colored in its autumn...

    i like this idea...if you can convince me enough through all the other seasons..i will stick with you during December...even with my doubts.

    you have a way with words, my friend.

    comfortable.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Warmth of memories past is often enough to keep us warm during cold, hard times. This really struck a chord. Although I love the winter with all its snowy, crisp and minty cold magic, nothing evokes gloom like winter does.
    | Posted on 2011-11-20 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]
      Very thought provoking. I too enjoy the warmth much more than the cold. No one wants to compare romance with freezing one's ass off as well! But of course this also makes me wonder if winter should be the time that a couple would snuggle up together by a fire with hot cocoa of something... inside avoiding the cold and watching snow fall beautifully through the windows.

    Short and sweet! I like it :)

    AERE
    | Posted on 2011-11-20 00:00:00 | by AEREASSAULT | [ Reply to This ]


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