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    dots Submission Name: Lucky Thirteendots
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    Author: GoalieStrick9
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 769
    Class/Type: Story/Death
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       (Always adding) Lucky Thirteen is about 13 kids who are taken from their homes and put on a new planet named AquaLuna


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    Prologue

    Living in this world is really not what it seems. All of the countries are fighting, firing gun shots and dropping bombs and I, along with my brother, jsut want to get off this violent planet. Although, I didn't know what I had in store for this wish.

    My name is Katelyn Eline and the brown-haired, well-built guy next to me is my brother, Parker Eline. I am also quite well-built (for a girl) and I have blonde hair with blye eyes. I am a master at the sipper riffle and my brother is pretty good at the shot gun. Since both of our parents died, life has been pretty horrid and I'm hopeing for a wish to take us and this war away.

    Chapter 1 - AquaLuna

    Parker and I were sitting in our basment, like usual, because of the war going on right outside our house. If I really could, I would love to bring peace to this place that's full of heck. My eyes witched to the door as I heard foosteps outside of it. Out of nowhere, the door was busted down. Our first instinct was to jump up and grab our weapons. "Oh look, some more kids," The guy had said. "Shall we take them for the project?" This time, it was a women's voice. The guy nodded, "Yes, we shall," he said, smirking. The two FBI agnets pulled us up the stairs and into their car. "OW!" I screamed, but it was no use, we were already driving. Driving away from the home I once knew.

    Once we arrived at the FBI agent headquearters, they pulled us out, handcuffing our hands together so we couldn't fight back.The man and women pushed us foward into a huge room with almost 200 TVs (or so it seemed) that were each focused on a different country's war. My eyes roamed the room until it caught on a crhair with an old, yet strong looking, man sitting in it. "Toss them with the otehrs. We have enough for Test Thirteen." The old man said, motioning the other two agents to a door.

    So, we were thrown in a room with 11 other kids. "What the heck? Where are we?!" I shouted. A brown haired girl walked up, "Shut your trap!" People really should know that, I never take that crap. "And who might you be?" The girl rolled her eyes, "I'm Kaylie, your worst nightmare." I scoffed, "So I must be yours then." A smirk played my lips as I looked at her. She was absolutly enraged. It was probuably because hs'e never had someone as tough, if not tougher, then her.

    Parker started to wonder around, until he ran into another couple of boys here. One with blacky, spikey hair and the other with slightly longer, blonde hair. "Uh, hey....." Parker spoke, softly. I was watching him intently, not speaking a word. He seemed t obe getting along with the other two boys there. "Hey, I'm Parker, you are?" Parker asked. The blonde haired guy answered, "I'm Corry and they guy next to me is Reiner." Corry spoke. Reiner nodded, "hey", was all he said. "So, what is this test about anyways?" Parker asked. "They're putting us on a planet called Aqualuna, which is quite similar to Earth," Corry answered. "Oh, so it has a war going on to then?" Parker asked, glumly. "No, it just has the same nessessities to life as Earth.You know, water, oxygen, all th other essetials," Corry once again answered. Parker nodded slowly as they explained it to him.

    "PARKER!" I shouted, waving him over. Parker turned from the boys and looked at me. He mouthed, 'what?' but I just waved him over once again. Parker sighed and walked over. "Yes?" he spoke, quietly. "We need to get out of here before they send us to that planet. I have a bad feeling about it." My eyes wandered the room. I only knew 3 other people here from 1.) Kaylie yelling at me and 2.) the two boys Parker was talking to. There were 8 other kids who I had no idea who they were. Parker never answered, so I said, "I have about feeling about this place." Parker sighed again, "Katelyn, chill, go meet some people and you'll be fine." He walked away and for a moment, I thought I was alone. I was the only one suspious about this and I just wanted to get out. But it'd be no use without any one else to help me...




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