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    dots Submission Name: Waiting by the Spring (My Frog Prince)dots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1029
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 809



    Description:
       I just finished writing an English Fairy Tale Essay and thought "Hey, I wrote over 2000 words on the frog prince, why not write some more in a poem???!!!"

    So here's a different version of the Frog Prince.


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    dotsWaiting by the Spring (My Frog Prince)dots
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    Sneaking gazes out the window
    Knowing you’re waiting for me
    By the spring

    The sun cannot set any faster
    Every minute feels like torture
    Patience

    Sliding away from reality
    Running towards the forest
    Barefoot

    The darkness consumes me
    Menacing creatures watching
    Yet all I see is you

    I no longer care for the ball
    It has lost meaning to me
    Innocence is gone

    Your presence captures my soul
    I let the hours pass me by
    Mesmerized

    I long for you to follow me home
    But you just watch me leave
    My sweet frog prince

    Sneaking gazes out the window
    Wondering if you’re waiting for me
    By the spring




    Submitted on 2011-11-20 14:53:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the whimsy here of the fairy tale. I like the longing, too. I think the poem would pack more punch, though, if you switch the last two stanzas around and left off the last line. Like this:

    Sneaking gazes out the window
    Wondering if you’re waiting for me
    By the spring

    I long for you to follow me home
    But you just watch me leave

    What do you think?

    Jane

    | Posted on 2011-11-30 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]


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