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    dots Submission Name: GOA/NRA BS ETCdots
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    Author: Runes
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    dotsGOA/NRA BS ETCdots
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    I've got a gun, so you need a gun.
    You've got a gun, so I need a gun.
    If shit hits the fan and the police don't come,
    we'll handle it by ourselves with our own guns.

    I have a gun, but when I pull the trigger
    it only fires once, so I need something bigger
    in case I'm attacked, because what if some nigger
    decides to break in on me? Yeah, I need bigger...

    But if you have two guns, then I might need three
    just in case you keep on firing at me.
    If my bullets run out, where on earth will I be?
    So if you have two guns, I'd better get three...

    And just in case you get three, too, I'll need four,
    and maybe a rifle to prop near the door.
    Some burglars knock first, then they kick in the door;
    better safe than sorry, that's what guns are for.

    A gun for my purse, maybe one for each room...
    A gun to bring peace and protection, a tool
    to keep me safe from all the rapists and fools
    who think I'm a victim to use and abuse.

    I've got a gun, so you've got a gun.
    You've got a gun, so I've got a gun.
    We can be friends, we can even have fun
    but how can I trust you if you've got a gun?




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      You have done it again. Once again you have created a work of art that succeeds to be simultaneously ironic, funny, and sad, all while laying bare a simple truth.

    In response;

    What if, one by one,
    We got rid of our guns?
    We could stand single file
    Throw them into a pile
    Now wouldn't that be fun!

    Haha.

    Nice work.

    Erin
    | Posted on 2011-11-22 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
      Effective Evolution

    i've got this thing
    and then you've got this thing
    and then we need the thing
    cuz the others got this thing
    and the thing that we need
    is there cuz we need it
    we make that thing bigger
    and call it a process
    so jane-plane is right
    but it's all semantics
    because a word is a word
    it depends on causal-integrations
    but then again
    there is hyper-extension
    which is the convention
    which ripple effects
    into the emotionally sensitive
    therefore creating(or validating by extroversive opposition)
    the personality that which is
    in question
    so it is on occasion
    that by using our curse words
    the curse is created
    which is why our guns
    are not guns
    our guns are puns
    but then again we are the niblonians(the three eyed fuzzy creatures from futurama who have been around since the beginning of the universe)
    you just happen to be a particularly spicy one
    and we can upon causal integration
    use our puns
    to mark the ones
    with literal guns
    which is the evolution
    revolution
    the homos started
    and i'm cuming to a point
    but i'm per verse
    which means
    i know all about brain babies
    a brand new (or age old) niblonian technique
    which means get orgasmic
    (which is actually an acute control of the pituitary gland in line constantly with the goal of self enlightenment and only on rare occasion and only upon validation of the semantically meta cycles of Inner Dimensional validation to update and learn to transmogrify linguistic systems--Nuero-gasm. although if you're not in a state of internal chaos or are using it for outcomes that which are to your mental health benefit then you're misusing it. basically turn a phrase away until you can understand the associative equivocations of the dsm models for good health as an extroversive anomaly practice with redundandcy until it becomes the normal modality BRAIN BABIES and mthe make it the introversive meta of assoctiative algorithms there you have it the key to the ENTIRE UNIVERSE uhm minus the mathmatics but uhm we can let the robots do it)

    but then again

    i've got this thing
    and then you've got this thing
    and then we need the thing
    cuz the others got this thing.........
    (repeat until the meta-verse collapses)

    what you've written is excellent, by the way.
    | Posted on 2011-11-21 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm . . . I like this poem and it's how it shows the contradictions and faulty logic going on in people's minds but I think you should take down what you've written in the description section. The poem stands without the explanation. I get what you're saying in a sense but I think it's better to leave it unsaid. I assume you don't go around calling people the "n word". You're trying to show the crazy thinking that goes on out in the world, right? So. . . you don't need to defend using the word when your using it to exemplify racist thinking that justifies violence.

    Just thoughts.
    | Posted on 2011-11-21 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      just what we need...MORE GUNS...

    we are such a paranoid society...

    be careful of the good guys, they're more dangerous than the bad guys...these days.

    | Posted on 2011-11-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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