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    dots Submission Name: Drunkdots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 743
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    Bytes: 525



    Description:
       *unfinished*


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    dotsDrunkdots
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    Here I sit sipping down liquid courage.
    Only to later end up vomiting up the pain,
    bring it all back to the forefront of my brain.
    I'll just lie here a while..
    Hugging my porcelain goddess.
    Watching the walls do the waltz.
    Oh, how they sway...
    Reminding me of how we once danced together.
    There it is again.
    Foolish memories, slapping me in the face.
    Shit, I'm a disgrace.
    Bartender get me another drink;..
    Before I start to think.




    Submitted on 2011-11-21 20:04:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awesome !!

    I guess only few get why it remains unfinished :D
    | Posted on 2011-11-22 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]


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