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    dots Submission Name: Chalk & Cheesedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 1289
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    dotsChalk & Cheesedots
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    If chalk was cheese, or beans were peas
    And no sometimes meant maybe
    If black was white, and day was night
    Then would you be my baby

    If truth was lie, or low meant high
    And a sparrow was a starling
    If young meant old, and hot was cold
    Then would you be my darling

    If love was hate, or chance was fate
    And stealing meant to borrow
    If wine was milk, and tweed was silk
    Would you love me still tomorrow

    If big was small, or stand meant fall
    And short meant being longer
    If old was new, and I were you
    Would you love me any stronger

    If girl was boy, or pain was joy
    And August was November
    If right was wrong, and ding meant dong
    My face would you remember

    If snow was red, or X was Z
    And grass was not for growing
    If push was pull, and cow meant bull
    Would your love for me keep growing

    If stop meant go, or friend meant foe
    And thick meant being clever
    If wind was rain, and France was Spain
    Would you love me forever





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      I faved this piece a few days ago---but my internet was compromised and couldn't comment. Just wanted you to know that I loved it, the lyricism, the whimsy, the rythm and rhyme--I can only say "Kudos" Loved it. That's all ( Not vet constructive is it--but why fix what ain't broken?Sally
    | Posted on 2014-02-23 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this one!

    Annie
    | Posted on 2013-08-31 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I loved the flow of this and the feeling of "up beat" as I read it! This reminds me of something that I would expect from Nikki Giovanni. I'll be looking forward to more of your writings! Great work! :)
    | Posted on 2011-12-01 00:00:00 | by Majesticdreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day Frank!

    This was like a song being sung by Sinatra. Your range of talent is so natural as Jacob mentioned.

    As always, well done and very beautiful!

    Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to Share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-11-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      you sure have a way with words, Frank.

    this is pretty much my favorite poem i have read here in a long while.

    just perfect...i like the way you rhyme so naturally...and i am not a lover of rhyming poetry..

    and the "ifs" are so true..if only...

    "if wind was rain, and France was Spain"

    and the rain in Spain really did fall mainly on the plain...would you be My Fair Lady....

    just a really good poem

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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