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    dots Submission Name: Spoken Munitiondots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 223/303/117
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Rant/Satire
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    dotsSpoken Munitiondots
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    Fifteen minutes after I left his side
    he burst into the house
    like flames raging through
    a bonfire of forgotten flaws.

    I could hear his voice bellow
    a colorful discourse
    from the bowels
    of the dungeon
    dragging in dirt from the past
    and digging up rusty things
    that had yet to surface!

    Everything spun in an upward spiral
    through the unfinished laundry chute
    out into the kitchen
    where I felt the lifeless weight
    of my apron begin
    to unravel
    as I faced his heat.

    I didnít hear every word,
    but I heard enough.

    I just wanted to gather my ashes
    and quietly blow away.




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    ||| Comments |||
      revisiting this one i just marvel at your metaphors....and similes...

    "like flames raging through a bonfire of forgotten flaws"

    really nice one there...among others...

    words like ammunition...shooting holes through our self-esteem


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      words can be so hurtful...i see the "house" as heart---

    like leaving someone and then having that person turn on you with a barrage of blame--

    after awhile you shut your ears...and you want to just disappear---but you can't...and the words continue to burn.

    people can make us feel responsible...when often we are not the ones. This has happened to me...especially in one relationship
    i remember...this poem helps me remember.

    the last two lines bring it to perfect closure---at least for the poem if not for the speaker.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-11-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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