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    dots Submission Name: Struggles of a Good Girldots

    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Bad girl, bad, bad, bad (finger pointing at you as you discover you've done something bad...) This is the beginning of many more finger pointing. Soon, you're pointing the finger at yourself saying the same exact words... to yourself.

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    dotsStruggles of a Good Girldots

    Eyes of wisdom gazing in the mirror
    Or is it a glare of corruption…
    The difference exists no more.
    My shield is fading
    Walls are cracking
    Internal structure collapsing
    Purity damaged;
    I am left beyond repair.

    Knowledge crosses my mind
    With a few hints of random blogs.
    The truth defenseless
    Against the tyranny of lies.
    Venom cautiously walks in
    Waiting for a declined invitation;
    Fearing the existence of innocence
    Yet unaware that such force is dead.

    Candles of love burning bright
    Or has it turned into a lustful night?
    Hands exploring undiscovered lands
    Body moving towards forbidden hands
    Stop signs nowhere to be found.
    Sound of rationality, a lifeless silent
    The animalistic ritual set in motion;
    Shedding the rules to its raw essence.

    Struggles of a good girl thrashing about
    For a past that bears no resemblance to now.
    Repeated mumbles of affirmative goodness
    Does nothing to soothe the empathic soul,
    Who has engraved the guilt of pleasurable events
    Unable to see the innocence of the day before.
    Changed, altered; corrupted
    Goodbye to that which has been lost.

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