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    dots Submission Name: My Fabulous Commentdots

    Author: SHRINKSDR
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 476/375/39
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy Fabulous Commentdots

    I want to comment on your write
    It reminds me of many of mine you might
    Like. there are a few that are quite hysterical
    and others deeply metaphysical

    Others are so heart breakingly sad
    It will take days to recover my lad.
    And then there are those so romantic
    Women will swoon and men become frantic.

    In their pathetic attempt to compete
    But itís never long before they retreat
    My poetic skills are so refined
    That even Shakespeare is left behind.

    So I bid you, donít waste your time
    On anyone elseís verse or rhyme
    My page should be your only concern
    Itís the only possible way to learn!

    Of glowing comments I should have a ton
    But instead of many I only have one!
    My technique and concepts are so insightful
    That little minds become hostile and spiteful.

    Oh! By the way what was your poem about??

    Submitted on 2011-11-28 20:11:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy day!

    This was a refreshing piece and it's antagonistic view supports what a lot of people feel about the competition to be "read".

    I enjoyed this piece!

    Smiles to share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-11-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      so tongue in cheek....

    i love this cause mmm reminds me of several poets i have run across...

    poetry is about sharing and giving...about a community of writers working for a common goal of spreading the word...not a competition...

    and not a "i'm better than you" ego...or i matter, you don't....

    i like that ending...it's like: "oh, you write poetry too? how nice!"
    | Posted on 2011-11-28 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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