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    dots Submission Name: CHRISTMAS down on the farm dots
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    Author: DUSTYTU
    Elite Ratio:    5.06 - 246/95/55
    Words: 1685
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCHRISTMAS down on the farm dots
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    CHRISTMAS down on the farm

    Twas the night before Christmas down here on the farm:

    not a creature was sleepin` , out here in the barn.

    We`d just settled down for a good game of craps,

    for it was too cold to go an` set traps.

    Even the mice were awake in the corner,

    hoping we`d leave, so`s they could have dinner.

    Then out in the pasture came one heck of a clatter.

    we rushed to the door to see what was the matter.

    To our disbelievin` eyes we saw them real clear,

    eight palominos and a drunken raindeer.

    his nose was lit up, like a great chunk of coal,

    it lit the night, like mornin`s first glow.

    A tiny old feller in a funny red suit,

    gave us a bow, then fell in the chute.

    His laugh was all jolly, as he arose from the ground,

    passing out presents, to those standing around.

    In a leap an` a bound, he jumped to his sleigh,

    he gave us a wink, `fore turnin` away.

    Then with a shout "MERRY CHRISTMAS and to all a good night"

    with the drunk in the lead they flew outta sight.




    Submitted on 2011-11-28 20:27:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy day Dusty!

    This was a delightful country rendition that put a smile on my face ;-)

    Thanks! Great piece!

    Holiday Smiles 2 Share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-11-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this humorous spin on an old classic. If flowed nicely, retained enough of the original...but then you added your own touches by playing with the setting, dialect and characters. Well done...and thank you!
    | Posted on 2011-11-29 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]


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